Tuesday, February 22, 2011

Birthday Party

We stood on the deck
smelled the rain
heard the wind
We stood on the deck
heard the thunder
saw the lightning
We stood on the deck
felt the rain
pour upon us
until we realized it was hail.
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4 comments:

  1. RachelFebruary 22, 2011 at 5:36 PM

    I like this soooooooo much, Abby!!!!
    Very well done! and I still laugh at the fact that it was hail not rain.

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  2. SaraFebruary 22, 2011 at 5:38 PM

    YES!!
    love. love.

    i told you guys it was hail. :)

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  3. NicoleFebruary 25, 2011 at 5:26 AM

    This is great. I love the last line. It totally takes the reader by surprise.

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  4. EmmaMarch 1, 2011 at 4:22 PM

    i like this.

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